月考英语作文展评
月考试卷是同课头管瑞民老师精心出的，根据我们九月份学习的话题内容，管老师把作文定位了Changes in Hometown，我认为，既体现了九月份学习的重点，又给学生降低了难度，希望学生进入九年级后，第一次月考都能考出自己的最好成绩。给孩子希望，就是最好的教育！
根据下列表格的提示，写一篇题为Changes in Hometown的英语短文。（80词左右）。内容要点：
过去
现在
1.旧房
1.高楼
2.河水肮脏
2.河水清澈
3.步行、骑自行车上班
3.乘公交车、小汽车上班
4.道路狭窄
4.环形公路宽阔
5.居住条件差
5.居住环境舒适
就这样的英语作文是最容易写的，因为出题人已经把写作的思路给了大家，写作的内容一清二楚。所以这样的作文，分四段书写是最佳的，第一段总写，第二段写过去，第三段写现在，最后一段总结。再加上书写整洁，一定会有一个美好的分数。
下面一起看看我们班高分英语作文：
Changes in Hometown
My grandpa has lived in my hometown for 50 years. He has seen the changes in our hometown by himself.
In the past, the houses were old and small. The stream was so dirty. And the gas was terrible. We went to work on foot or by bike. The roads were narrow. And our living conditions were bad.
But now, we live in the tall building. The stream is getting good. We go to work by bus or by car. There are many ring roads in my hometown. And they are wide. Our living conditions are comfortable.
Our country has developed rapidly. And we must study hard to keep uo with the times.
孙思恒同学的作文，老师扣掉了一份，，有点遗憾。文章第一段使用了两个现在完成时句子，为文章增色不少，使用的短语see sb\sth by oneself.亲眼看到，很是棒。第二段写过去，所以都要使用一般过去时，孙同学的时态掌握的很好，就是步行翻译错了，应该是on foot, 而不是by foot.第三段写现在，孙同学为了避免文字的单一，使用了一般现在时，现在进行时，还运用了There be 句型，唯一一点，前面的环形公路使用了复数，后面却用了it’s.最后一段，很有号召力，强调祖国的迅速发展，所以作为学生要努力学习，赶上时代的发展，完美收篇。
Changes in Hometown
With the development of
In the past, most of the people lived in old and dark houses. And the rivers were very dirty. People had to work on foot or by car. The roads were very narrow, too. And the living conditions were very bad.
But now, people have already lived in high and bright buildings. The rivers and streams are clear. People usually work by bus or by car. On the other hand, the living conditions and the environment are not only comfortable but also very clean.
I believe our life will be more and more beautiful.
李瑞琪同学的作文一样的精彩，是按照老师强调的按四段来写，总分总的格式，文章中几乎没有错误，仍然是扣掉了一份。作者在第一段总起随着中国的发展，我们的生活变得越来越好。第二段使用一般过去时，写过去的条件，作为介宾使用交通工具时，做好使用on foot or by car。第三段开头使用现在完成时，为文章增分，最后一句的not only…but also非常的棒。最后一段的我相信写得好，展望未来，中国有美好的发展前景。
Changes in Hometown
With the development of
In the past, a lot of people lived in old and dark houses. The river was too dirty. People often went to work on foot or by bike. It’s slowly. The roads were norrow. The living conditions were weak.
Since reform and opening—up, many buildings have been built. The river is clean. People have gone to work by bus or by taxi. The ring roads are wide. The living conditions are comfortable for people to live.
Great changes have taken place in my hometown. I believe my hometown will become more and more beautiful. I love my hometown!
白雪雪的作文写的很有深度，遵循了老师经常说的，面对中招作文，我们要写出最复杂的简单句，最简单的复合句。第一段总写随着中国的发展，家乡变得越来越美丽，为下文喜欢自己的家乡埋下伏笔。第二段写过去，第三段开头的，自从改革开放，许多高楼大厦拔地而起，并使用现在完成时态，为文章增色了不少。最后一段的总结最棒，第一句总括家乡的巨大变化，最后表达自己的感情，很喜欢家乡。
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对刚刚进入九年级才一个月的孩子来说，能够把英语作文写到这种地步，真的很是了不起。因为我们还没有进行作文的专项训练，没有突出作文的重要性。但是还有那么多的孩子的作文不尽人意，甚至一个字都没有写，我知道，对于作文我们还有很长的路要走。
作文需要训练，作文需要老师的重视。我相信，在以后的学习中，孩子的作文都会有很大的提升。
