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雅思写作范文赏析——如何给罪犯量刑(2)

2013-01-25 
如何给罪犯量刑

  An example for setting minimum and maximum penalties is competition law where a person being held liable of a crime under this law will be convicted to pay a fine , according to the harm caused by the violation and the profit gained by the violator through committing the crime .

  As for the exemptions , in some countries the law exempts thiefs stealing food during a a period of famine taking into consideration the distress and hunger .

  Also , a person killing in self-defense will be exempted from punishment .

  分析:虽然这篇文章存在着较少的语法错误,段落结构设计一般,但是

  1.字数296 ,完全符合高分作文的标准 ;本篇文章没有使用模板

  2.内容:论点鲜明,论证充分,论据合理

  3.结构:结构清晰连贯,段落较清晰,关联性强

  4.语言表达准确多样 :词汇丰富,重复较少;句型多样复杂(宾语从句,定语从句,状语从句,there be 句型等);


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