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Advantages and Disadvantages of Partime job
Partime job is the trend of modern society. It provides incomes for some poor students living or entering school. Nevertheless, some people think partime job will distract student's study. I think partime job have more advantages than disadvantages.
Young people can learn from partime job that money don't come easily. They have to work to it. Plus, they can learn something that school can't teach through working, such as doing dish wash or delivering food.
Our society isn't perfect that many young people have to work for themselves. But, we heard some bad news and outlaws about partime youth. Therefore, our govenment has to watch them and protect them away from bad enviroment, for they need partime jobs to maintain their living.
