联考期中英语作文评析
How to Be a Greener Person
这次作文是我出的，根据近段学习的话题，关于污染的分类，污染的严重性，整个世界的污染现状及其作为一名普通的公民，我们应该如何做等话题，出了这次英语作文How to Be a Greener Person。
这次英语作文不算难，对学生来说，很是有话可说。对于学生的作文，还是很满意的。第一学生的卷面大部分同学写的很是干净工整，要求如果考场有时间，一定要打草稿。第二，学生都学会了英语作文要分段，大部分同学都采用了三段式的英语作文，看起来一目了然。第一段总说环境的危害，第二段具体写出保护环境的措施，第三段总结，发出号召。
为了扩大表扬面，这次的作文评析采用了“三段式”的表扬方法，展示给大家优秀的开头部分和精彩的结尾部分。
优秀的开头：
白雪雪Nowadays our environment has become more and more serious. So it’s our duty to protect the environment. But how to protect our environment? Here are some ways:
孙思恒：Now China has developed rapidly. But there is too much pollution around us, such as air pollution ,soil pollution ,water pollution and so on. So let’s be a greener person to protect the environment.
李瑞琪：With the increase in population ，the environment has destoryed little by little. But not everybody knows the importance of protecting the environment. Here are some ways to be a greener person .
张欣欣：As we know, pollution is one of the Chinese biggest problems. But none of us likes pollution. The government is doing something useful to protect the environment. How to be a greener person to protect the environment?
郭少奇：The environment is becoming worse and worse, but everbody knows how to protect the environment. Here are some ways to protect the environment.
姜凤霞：As we know,good environment is good for us to study and work. But now our environment is very bad. So we should try our best to protect the environment. Here are some ways :
王宁：Would you like to be a green person? Here are some suggestions:
王雪：As we know, the environment is harmful to our life and our health. So, what should we do?
这些开头，学生各有特色。值得赞的是，这些孩子使用了不同的表达形式，把平时学的短语和句型熟练的应用到了作文中，比如：Would you like to be a green person? what should we do? be harmful to, Here are some ways : try one’s best to do sth, The environment is becoming worse and worse, as we know, So it’s our duty to protect the environment. 等等，这些都是平时学习的重点，学生能够学以致用，达到了教学的目的。
精彩的结尾：
白雪雪Easier said than done. We are supposed to take action to protect our earth. I believe, if everyone does them, our life will become more and more beautiful.
Let’s be a greener person from now on!
张欣：If everyone does their best to protect the environment, our earth will become more and more beautiful day by day.
陈舒旗：Speak louder than words. I hope we all take part in it.
崔晨珂：In a word, we should do everthing we can to protect the environment.
柴振康：If everyone makes a contribution to protecting the environment, the world will become much more beautiful.
张艳华：It’s our duty to protect the environment, so let’s be a greener person !
学生的这些结尾，很有号召力，精彩极啦！Easier said than done. Speak louder than words. 这些英语谚语在文中使用，为文章添色好多。make a contribution to，It’s our duty to，be supposed to, take part in等词组用得恰到好处。the world will become much more beautiful，so let’s be a greener person ! we should do everthing we can to protect the environment. 这些总结性极强，号召力极大地句子让文章完美结尾，好！
中间保护环境的建议：
We must turn off the lights before we leave a room, so we can save electricity.
We should water plants、trees and flowers in our daily life.
We had better walk or ride a bike instead of taking a bus or a taxi if you travel to a short distance.
We ought to use both sides of paper.
Take a cloth bag when you go shopping. Don’t use plastic bag.
Don’t spit and throw litter here and there.
Turn off the tap when you are brushing your teech.
Stop factories pouring waste water into rivers.
Don’t use paper cup.
We should collect the waste paper and soft drink bottles.
中间的一段要写的做一位环保人应该做的事情，只要列举3—4条即可。这些句子，在我们的课文中，或者平时做的阅读中都会出现，只要平时多记，多留心，这一部分内容应该没有多大问题。以上是从学生作文中总结的句子，很是好！
看着孩子们写的作文都有不同程度的提升，作为老师很是高兴。因为我们不怕孩子的基础差，怕的是孩子没有向上的斗志。从作文来看，说明每位同学都在平时做了努力，为他们鼓掌，喝彩！
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