高分范文
As is vividly depicted by the drawing above, the job-hunting girl refuses a service post without any hesitation, complaining that she will never take a job of serving others①. At the same time she is wondering why finding a promising job is so difficult in modern society②。
This phenomenon can easily be found anywhere in our daily life③, especially on campus. On the one hand, many job-seekers are reluctant to take jobs that they consider to be humble and trivial, such as being a secretary or an assistant, because they have great ambitions and they only want to ride on the peak of success. What is amazing is that they are not conscious that ambition is to be achieved step by step④. On the other hand, wanting to gain more but pay less, both the jobless and graduating students aspire to seek a job that is well-paid, relaxed and comfortable. This kind of “no work, all play” attitude toward life can be destructive to both personal and social development. We should not look down upon service industry, the third industry, because it does provide us with many employment opportunities and positions⑤。
Therefore, it is high time that we took effective measures to improve the current situation. For one thing, an education campaign should be launched to popularize the idea that “the longest journey starts with a single step” and to cultivate a down-to-earth attitude toward life. For another, the tendency of being lazy must be eradicated from the mind of the young. Only in this way can people realize their value of life better and can unemployment rate be reduced and thus can social harmony be achieved⑥。
佳作妙译
正如上面的漫画所示，这个找工作的女孩毫不犹豫地拒绝了一个服务岗位，她还抱怨一直找不到工作。同时她还纳闷为什么在如今找个有前途的工作这么难。
这种现象在我们的生活中随处可见，尤其在校园里更加明显。一方面，很多求职者不愿意从事秘书或助理等工作，他们认为这些是卑微且无足轻重的。他们有更大的抱负，想直接登上成功的顶峰。可是他们没有意识到理想抱负是需要一步一步实现的。另一方面，很多失业者和毕业生都想少劳多得，想得到一份轻松舒适而且薪水不菲的工作。这种“好逸恶劳”的生活态度对个人和社会的发展都是很不利的。我们不应看不起服务业，第三产业，因为它确实为我们提供了很多工作机会和职位。
因此，采取一些必要措施来改善这种情况已经是当务之急。一方面，应该发起一场教育运动来普及这种“千里之行，始于足下”的理念和脚踏实地的生活态度。另一方面，要把懒惰的思想从青少年的思想中根除。只有这样人们才能更好地实现自己的人生价值，才能让失业率大幅下降，才能实现社会和谐。
名师点评
① complaining that she will never take a job of serving others: 伴随状语。
② why finding a promising job is so difficult in modern society: 这个句子充当了整个句子的宾语，叫做宾语从句。
特殊疑问词why, what, when等引导的宾语从句必须使用正常的陈述语序，不得使用主谓倒装的形式。
例如，这句就不能写成：why is finding a promising job so difficult in modern society?finding a promising job是主语。is是系动词。
再如：I don’t know what his name is。
绝对不能写成：I don’t know what is his name。
③ 2008年真题阅读选项中的句子。
原句为：Political compromises are easily found throughout the U. S. history。
稍加改动，变成了一个个性化的句子引入第二段内容的模板，虽然没有华丽的辞藻，但是非常精彩和纯正。
④ be conscious that: 意识到，that后边必须接完整的主谓宾结构。
这个表达等同于be aware that，可以进行同意替换。
此外：be conscious of 和be aware of 在意思上也等同于这两者，表示意识到。
但是：be conscious of 和be aware of后边要接单词或者短语，一般不能加句子。
⑤ the third industry: 第三产业，是service industry(服务业)的同位语。
同位语其实一般都是废话，等同于前面的词。
巧妙地使用同位语，可以把单调的句子变得错落有致、抑扬顿挫。
it does provide us with: does在句中表强调，翻译成“确实”。
⑥ Only in this way can… realize… and can… be… and thus can… be…：排比句，短促有力，气势强大，使得对未来的展望显得信心十足!
普通的被考生用烂了的这个句型：Only in this way can we live in a harmonious society，被本文的作者巧妙地改写成了一个精彩的排比句。
这样的作文，怎么能不得高分呢!
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