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新东方樊黎明 2011年5月28日IELTS作文第一时间评析

2011-06-03 
The table below shows the population sizes and the rates of change for four different parts from 1950 to 2000in the world, and predicted population sizes and the rates of change from 2000 to 2050.
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  下面是2011年5月28日雅思作文第一时间评析,由新东方的雅思写作名师樊黎明所发布。2011年5月28日雅思作文延续了这一段时间的雅思写作风格,就是将老题换一种说法,再次出现。那么具体情况是什么样的呢?我们一起来看一下这篇雅思作文评析。

  Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right and wrong so that they can behave well. Others say that teachers should only teach students academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

  一些人认为老师应当负责教育学生判断是非,这样他们就能有好的表现。另外一些人则认为老师应当只教授学术科目。谈论双方观点并且给出你的观点。

  what is right and wrong / academic subjects

  前者其实是道德教育,即德育;后者是学术科目教育,即智育。作为一个合格的教师,应当同时教授德育和智育。题目是Discuss both views and give your opinion,两种观点必须都提及,缺一不可。特别注意道德教育的说法:moral education。道德的说法:morality,道德约束:moral restriction,道德边界:moral boundary。

  本题是老题,与2006年3月18日的考题完全相同。属于教育类话题“教育的功能”分支。题型属于议论文中的“双边讨论”。

  今天的题目在连续继续是考纯老题,而与之前不同的是,今天的题目是2006年的考题。之前曾连续3次考过08年的老题,4次考04年的老题。这个题目难度较低,并且曾在考试中大量出现过(详见下列4道类似真题),应该是考生考前必备的题目。

  1. Some people think the main purpose of schools is to turn the children into good citizens and workers, rather than to benefit them as individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? (061014)

  2. It is generally believed that education is of vital importance to the development of individuals and the well-being of societies. What should education consist of to fulfill both these functions? (050312)

  3. Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace in the future. Others think the true function of a university is to provide access to knowledge for its own sake. What do you think are the main functions of a university? (030419, 040117, 050528, 070113,071208)

  4. Some people think university education should prepare students for employment. Other people think university has other functions. Discuss both views and what do you think the function of university education. (091024)

  本文适合写成单边支持型。第一段让步段,先承认教授学术科目的重要性,然后讲只教授学术科目而不讲道德教育的坏处。第二段讲道德教育的必要性和好处。

  I. Introduction

  1. 文章背景:这个世界已经由传统的制造经济转向了知识经济的时代,在这个时代里,知识往往就意味着成功和财富。The world has experienced a switch from traditional manufacturing industry to a knowledge economy, in which knowledge usually means success and wealth.

  2. 交代主题:在这样的环境下,一些人认为学校只要提供学术知识,帮助学生找到一份好的工作就可以了。Under such circumstance, there rises a notion that schools and teachers should only focus on imparting academic knowledge students which can help them secure a decent job.

  3. 我的观点: 但是我的观点是道德教育同样应当被重视,否则这种教育制度会引起社会埋下隐患。From my perspective, however, moral education should also be placed a premium, otherwise the educational system will pose a huge hazard to society.

  1. II. Body 1:让步段

  1. 让步:承认理论知识的重要性:不可否认,教授学术科目会给学生带来很多好处。There is no denying that academic subjects can help students succeed in their career. 有了理论知识,他们就可以更容易找到工作,并且得到更高的收入。With the theoretical knowledge they learn from their teachers, graduates are more qualified are more likely to fulfil the requirement of employers, thus gaining a better position and higher payment.

  2. 驳斥:只教授学术科目的后果:但是,在没有道德做约束的前提下,这样的学术知识是非常危险的。However, without any moral boundary, such academic knowledge is quite dangerous. 一些掌握了高科技的科学家和政客如果没有道德的约束,那就有可能做出危害人类的举动,如克隆人和生化武器。Scientists and politicians without any moral restriction are highly likely to do some deeds which will pose a hazard to human society, such as human cloning and the development of biochemical weapons.

  III. Body 2:交代道德教育的重要性

  1. 道德教育的必要性1:预防犯罪:由于年幼无知,青少年很难明辨是非,而此时适当的道德指引可以有效地帮助减少青少年犯罪的几率。Teenagers are too naïve and innocent that they can hardly distinguish right from wrong. Proper moral guidance at this stage can effectively reduce the chance of juvenile delinquency.

  2. 论据(此处可讲具体的德育方法):通过榜样、奖惩的方式,帮学生形成健全的人格。

  3. 道德教育的必要性2:社会与人际交往:现代化的社会越来越重视合作与团队精神,而道德水准有问题的人将很难融入社会中去。Modern society focuses on team work more than ever before, and people with poor morality can hardly integrate with society.

  4. 论据(此处可讲德育的具体好处):具备良好品德的人更有可能拥有较大的朋友圈circle of friends,而这对他的事业和生活都是非常有帮助的。

  IV. Conclusion

  1. 重申观点:综上所述,教授学术科目固然重要,但是必须对学生同时进行道德教育才能培养出人格健全的人才。In conclusion, teaching academic subjects is indeed necessary, but it should be integrated with moral education. Only a successful combination of both can our education system cultivate talents with healthy personality to meet the requirement of modern society.

  2. 解决方法:因此道德教育应该成为学校教育的组成部分。Thus, moral education should be an essential component of school education.

  A类Task 1 Table 表格,动态

  The table below shows the population sizes and the rates of change for four different parts from 1950 to 2000in the world, and predicted population sizes and the rates of change from 2000 to 2050.

  比较四个地区的population的变化,有total population,and average annual change percentage ,一个表中的left part 是1990-2000四个地区(North American,Australia,Europe, Japan)注意不是四个国家,右半部分是predicted2000-2050,two of them increased while two of them decreased.

  注意:表格中有两个时间段:过去和将来,因此文章中需要注意过去时和将来时的运用。

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