谢振礼托福独立写作范文
TOEFL Independent Writing
Topic: 卫生保健
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The most important thing that the government should do to improve healthcare is to clean the environment.
Use specific reasons and examples or details to support your answer.
审题：政府为了改善全民保健，其最重要的工作是清洁环境。你同意还是不同意?(本文的一个可行看法：政府造福全民保健不但要搞环境清洁，借此预防疾病，还要投资在医疗方面，帮助病人恢复健康)
破题：同意?不同意?(你提出个人的立场/主题来回答问题。没有标准答案，因为你可以完全同意，也可以完全不同意，也可以有第三种答案，问题看两边。比方说政府除了花钱做好清洁环境作为预防，还要支出经费来搞医疗。缺一不可。)
陷阱：如果你回答完全同意，可能很难自圆其说。如果相反地，你完全不同意，可能也不容易自圆其说。本文虽然同意预防疾病的重要，但是也同时强调医疗疾病的重要。保健(healthcare)一词引申预防疾病和治疗疾病的重要，所以从prevention+cure双向发展全文，不算跑题而答非所问。(读者的看法如何?欢迎来信讨论。)
关键字：
之一 healthcare, health care (the maintenance or improvement of health via the prevention and treatment of disease)
之二 to clean the environment
之三 the most important thing for the government
参考四段：逻辑结构 起承转合 前呼后应 自圆其说
起 both prevention and cure are important to healthcare
承 the importance of prevention in healthcare
转 the importance of cure in healthcare
合 both prevention and cure are important to healthcare
Essay: 谢振礼 原创
Referring to public health, it intuitively makes sense the cliché that “An ounce of prevention is worth a pound of cure.” The environmental cleaning, usually being less expensive than clinical therapy, plays an essential role in ensuring people’s physical wellbeing, but there would be no real healthcare without medical treatment in place. For that matter, prevention and cure efforts both substitute and complement when it comes to improving healthcare.
To begin with, the importance of the environmental hygiene should never be overlooked, considering that with a sanitary environment perhaps the work of healthcare could be half done. This is the basic premise of public health, whereby appropriate investing in widespread prevention efforts is expected to prevent sickness in thousands of people, and save millions of dollars in future medical expenses. It is often true that most modern-day healthcare systems reward the life-saving cures that treat people once they are already sick, and not enough is being done to carry out cost-effective public health programs. Among other things, the best way to reduce the risk of mosquito-borne disease is preventing mosquito bites, and for that matter it is imperative to keep the environment clean. At the same time, minimizing air pollution and rates of pollution-related illnesses could lead to major savings in healthcare costs. In view of these examples and more, it is necessary for the authorities to clean the environment so as to prevent people from being exposed to unknown hazards.
However, access to comprehensive healthcare services is also important for restoring and maintaining health, even though such services require a great deal of money. While most people assume that germs and genes cause diseases, actually there is still a mystery surrounding why certain people get sick while others do not. This being the case, healthcare systems are organizations that are necessarily established to meet the health needs of target populations under different levels of sanitary conditions. Speaking of money, since it seems inevitable for certain people to get sick, naturally the focus on treatment rather than prevention is reflected in the government’s huge health expenditure. As a result, every healthcare system is likely to be struggling with rising costs and uneven quality despite the hard work of well-intentioned clinicians. Taking human vulnerability into account, the best way to get sick is for the people to live in an environment without hygiene; just as the best way to improve healthcare is for the government to clean the environment.
As a conclusion, not only prevention but also cure should be key to improving healthcare. While cleaning the environment may be costly for the government to manage healthcare, treating diseases may be even more expensive. Therefore, it is good to always remember that, in healthcare as in many other things that are important to life, a little precaution before is preferable to a lot of fixing up afterwords.
