雅思托福写作心得：写作仿少林【舞其圆】(下)
圆形，定位，装配
海外大学教师谢振礼投稿
真题举例运用【舞其圆】
男女工作不同
Some people think that men and women have different qualities. Therefore, some certain jobs are suitable for men and some jobs are suitable for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
短篇论说文的逻辑规矩呈圆形。因为是无中生有所以是创作。因为有规矩才能去杂存清，做到循规蹈矩不逾矩。耍圆的本事，无师自通，人人都有一套，谁也教不了谁。谢振礼老师推荐的一套是【圆形】逻辑，【定位】四段，【装配】18句。这是看不见的模板，可以说是【隐形模板】。
》圆形：强调主题的焦点
在圆周上的起点就是终点。论说文从哪里说起，也在哪里结束。如果开头第一句是表明立场，申论主题，那么结论的最后一句显然是坚定立场，重申主题。开头前呼而结论后应。写引言是把主题的范文从宽变窄。写结论恰好相反，是从窄回宽。换句话说，结论段是开头段的倒影，含义相同，句子的排列次序颠倒。
圆有圆心，这是主题的焦点。论说文的中体段落必定发展于圆圈的范围内，不离焦点。离开焦点就会走题。支持主题的内容尽在圆的范文圈内。无用的点子抛出圆外，所谓去杂存请。圆圈之内，段落逻辑关联连。段落内句句串连。
》定位：结构采用四段的组织。
主题放在心图为首。四段定位：起承转合。起是开头，申论主题。承是接头，支持主题。转是转头，支持主题。合是回头，重申主题。
中体两段并立，比较简单处理雅思或托福的题型，如利弊，因果，比较，男女，赞成反对，科学艺术，环境遗传。中国学员习惯四段作文。好习惯何必改?
》装配：打造18句内容支持主题。
常态装配18句话：起3承6转6合3。开头1-2-3. 接头4-5-6-7-8-9. 转头10-11-12-13-14-15。回头16-17-18.
1=18 申论主题=重申主题
2=17 集中焦点=还原焦点
3=16 一分为二=二合为一
4=招牌句。来龙自3的一分为二。去脉到16的二合为一。
5-6-7-8-9 随着招牌发展，提出理由，例子，细节，支持招牌。
10=招牌句。来龙自3的一分为二。去脉到16的二合为一。
11-12-13-14-15 随着招牌句发展，提出理由，例子，细节，支持招牌。
》开头【起】
1. It is generally agreed that men and women are created equal but they have different missions in life due mainly to biological inclinations.
2. This leads one to believe that some specific jobs better fit either males or females only, with people of both sexes doing what they do best.
3. Although the gender issue in terms of work opportunities and income disparities still exists today, no one should ever imagine changing the charm that belongs to women and the strength to men.
》接头【承】
4. To begin with, women's charm often works wonders.
5. To illustrate this point, one need only to see the way they use men to do what they want.
6. In general, women are superior to men in caring and nurturing and other fields related to domesticity, therefore those women who seek to be equal to men in strength lack correct ambition.
7. It is interesting to point out that, in the fields of administrative and secretarial workplace, females outnumber males about four to one while the number of female presidents and prime ministers, and of CEOs and managers, is also up and rising.
8. Furthermore, nowadays it is scarcely possible to stop women from replacing men in whatever jobs in which talents and abilities are concerned and strength is not essential.
9. If at this time there are still more men in charge, it is because women have other jobs that are more rewarding and charming to do, like being mothers at home.
》转头【转】
10. In comparison, men have traditionally been viewed as the breadwinners or workers，owing to their strength.
11. The macho-image is active and aggressive.
12. Needless to say, some particular jobs may exclusively go to them.
13. One should note here that women, naturally passive and charming, need not apply for such posts as miners, sailors, ironsmiths or butchers and the like.
14. In view of this, the traditional stereotypes are as good today as they used to be.
15. What really matters then is that men and women are happy in their corresponding roles, even though there are obvious disparities between individuals as a result of gender.
》回头【合】
16. As a conclusion, one should not forget the paradox that just as women's strength is charm, men's charm is strength, other things being equal.
17. Besides, one should also accept that the quality of employment depends as much on biological differences as on qualification similarities.
18. In real life, neither gender is the weak sex.
【套话举例】用来接连句子，搞得比较结构成圆，补充逻辑。
1. It is generally agreed that...
4. To begin with,
5. To illustrate this point,
6. In general,
7. It is interesting to point out that...
8. Furthermore,
10. In comparison,
12. Needless to say,
13. One should note here that...
14. In view of this,
16. As a conclusion,
17. Besides,
18. In real life,
【舞其圆】重点小复习
【3】等于【承4加转10】又等于合段【16】
--开头段三句。由宽而窄。1-2-3前呼18-17-16.
申论主题：【1】qualities of men and women>缩小主题：【2】biological differences>聚集焦点【3】：men's strength【4】 vs. women's charm【10】一分为二
--结尾段三句。由窄而宽。16-17-18后应3-2-1. 次序相反。
【16】二合为一【4加10】。【17】还原焦点。【18】重申主题。
