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Issue26"Whilesomeleadersingovernment，sports，industry，andotherareasattributetheirsuccesstoawell-developedsenseofcompetition，asocietycanbetterprepareitsyoungpeopleforleadershipbyinstillinginthemasenseofcooperation."这个题目是GREISSUEWRITING中很热的一个：cooperationandcompetition.而这个题目中又加入了另外一个比较热的:leadership.我们来看看这个是怎么来阐述他自己的观点的。Whichisabetterwaytoprepareyoungpeopleforleadership:developinginthemaspiritofcompetitivenessoroneofcooperation?又是一个问句开头，点出这个statement的题眼。Thespeakerfavorsthelatterapproach，eventhoughsomeleadersattributetheirsuccesstotheirkeenlydevelopedcompetitivespirit.Itendtoagreewiththespeaker，forreasonshavingtodowithourincreasinglyglobalsociety，andwiththetruekeystoeffectiveleadership.
看来这里面真是有几个都比较喜欢用自问自答的形式来开头，然后直接引入题目中speaker的观点再来陈述自己的view.Thechiefreasonwhyweshouldstresscooperationinnurturingyoungpeopletodayisthat，astomorrow‘sleaders，theywillfacepressingsocietalproblemsthatsimplycannotbesolvedapartfromcooperativeinternationalefforts.Forexample，allnationswillneedtocooperateinanefforttodisarmthemselvesofweaponsofmassdestruction;toreduceharmfulemissionswhichdestroyozoneandwarmtheEarthtodangerouslevels;toreduceconsumptionoftheEarth‘sfinitenaturalresources;andtocureandpreventdiseasesbeforetheybecomeglobalepidemics.Otherwise，weallriskself-destruction.Inshort，globalpeace，economicstability，andsurvivalofthespeciesprovidepowerfulreasonsfordevelopingeducationalparadigmsthatstresscooperationovercompetition.
指出合作的重要性，然后列出了原因和具体的事例。这个段落的例子都是从大方面着手，论证的非常有力，并且运用了平行结构—就是排比—增加了力度，语言也体现了，逻辑也体现了。非常好的一个开头，如果后边不跑题，这个文章不会低于5分。Asecondcompellingreasonforinstillinginyoungpeopleasenseofcooperationovercompetitionisthateffectiveleadershipdependslessonthelatterthantheformer.Aleadershouldshowthatheorshevaluestheinputofsubordinatesforexample，byinvolvingthemindecisionsaboutmattersinwhichtheyhaveadirectstake.Otherwise，subordinatesmightgrowtoresenttheirleader，andbecomeunwillingtodevotethemselveswholeheartedlytotheleader‘smission.Inextremecasestheymightevensabotagethatmission，oreventaketheirusefulideastocompetitors.Andafterall，withoutotherpeopleworthleadingapersoncannotbealeaderletaloneaneffectiveone.
这个部分是开始陈述为什么自己认为合作要比竞争更重要的原因。用下属和上司的关系来做例子证明合作的意义和影响更大些。Athirdreasonwhyinstillingasenseofcooperationistobepreferredoverinstillingasenseofcompetitionisthatthelatterservestonarrowaleader‘sfocusonthwartingtheeffortsofcompetitors.Withsuchtunnelvisionitisdifficulttodevelopother，morecreativemeansofattainingorganizationalobjectives.Moreover，suchmeansofteninvolvesynergisticsolutionsthatcallforalliances，partnerships，andothercooperativeeffortswithwould-becompetitors.Thosewhowouldopposethespeakermightpointoutthatathrivingeconomydependsonafreelycompetitivebusinessenvironment，whichensuresthatconsumersobtainhigh-qualitygoodsandservicesatlowprices.Thuskeyleadershippositions，especiallyinbusiness，inherentlycallforacertaintenacityandcompetitivespirit.And，acompetitivespiritseemsespeciallycriticalintoday‘shyper-competitivetechnology-driveneconomy，whereanyleaderfilingtokeeppacewithever-changingbusinessandtechnologicalparadigmssoonfailsbythewayside.However，aleader‘seffectivenessasacompetitorisnotnecessarilyinconsistentwithhisorherabilitytocooperatewithsubordinatesorwithcompetitors，asnotedabove.
这个部分是辨证的谈了合作和竞争的关系，从中用了商业中的一些事例来支持自己认为合作更重要的观点。Insum，ifweweretotakethespeaker‘sadvicetoofarwewouldriskbecomingaworldwithoutleaders，whoarebredofacompetitivespirit.Wewouldalsoriskthekeybenefitsofafree-marketeconomy.Nevertheless，onbalanceIagreethatitismoreimportanttoinstillinyoungpeopleasenseofcooperationthanoneofcompetition.Thespeaker‘spreferenceproperlyreflectsthegrowingroleofcooperativealliancesandeffortsinsolvingtheworld‘smostpressingproblems.Afterall，inaworldinwhichourverysurvivalasaspeciesdependsoncooperation，thespiritofevenhealthycompetition，nomatterhowhealthy，isoflittlevaluetoanyofus.
在最后又重新陈述了自己的观点当作是点题。来个小结，这个文章和我们评过的ETS的满分文章相比要水平高，语言也非常简洁有力，而且例子也都举的恰倒好处，逻辑线索非常明了，是一篇难得的好文章。
前天给大家留了个问题问：什么是effectivewriting，这个就是effectivewriting。但是感觉大家都不是讨论的很积极的样子。再说一次，这个概念是GREWRITING中非常重要的两个概念中的一个，也是考点所在。大家好好思考一下吧。
