8457 2012年11月24日雅思写作范文：手机传讯 (IELTS 20121124)

 　　8457 2012年11月24日雅思写作范文：手机传讯 (IELTS 20121124)

　　Will Letter-writing Disappear?

　　2012年11月24日中国托福考区

　　Jeenn Lee Hieh 谢振礼原创范文

　　IELTS Topics (related prompts): 出现过的相近真题举例

　　1>More and more people use the mobile phone to communicate, and no longer write letters to each other. Some people think that the skill of letter-writing will soon disappear completely. Do you agree or disagree? How important do you think letter-writing is? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from our own knowledge or experience.

　　2>Will letter-writing disappear due to the increased use of mobile phones and computers? In the era of cell phone and email, will people still write letters to each other? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

　　3>With the increasing use of mobile phones and computers, some people think that the traditional skill of letter-writing will disappear completely. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

　　4>With the increasing use of mobile phones, fewer people tend to write letters. Some people believe that letter-writing will disappear completely. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

　　Example Writing (谢振礼 Jeenn Lee Hsieh):

　　Will the mobile phone replace the traditional letter-writing completely? When was the last time you received a long letter full of rambling details? To the first question, the answer is probably 'yes'; to the second, the response is usually 'don't remember'.

　　Using the cell-phone to communicate has many advantages, and none of these is as obvious as time-saving. It was then when sending or receiving letters was the traditional way for people to keep in touch with each other, which often had to take days, even weeks. And it is now when all you have to do is hold a hand phone, touch it, click a button if any, and the message zips off to the recipient--usually in a matter of seconds. In addition, the mobile phone has become so technologically convenient and efficient that you can take calls or check your correspondence and reply instantly from anywhere, entirely independent of mailing services provided by the post office. No wonder, most of the users who are awash in the information technology spend their days walking around with their noses buried in such smart-phones as a Blackberry, iPhone, HTC, you name it. Under these circumstances, who should fail to imagine that the skill of letter-writing that used to be would be no longer?

　　These days, cases of communication other than using the mobile phone are few and far between. However, in spite of being down in popularity and out of fashion, letter-writing is not dead, not yet. Perhaps, there are a few people among the older generation who still prefer words on paper rather than on the screen. Without a doubt, the skill of letter-writing as an art is losing ground, even though plenty of people may pretend to believe that the importance of traditional way of writing cannot be over-emphasized. So it should come as no surprise that hand-written letters, the like of which are now rarely seen, were saved and treasured as family keepsakes and histories. In light of unprecedented use of technology, it should not be long before the arrival of the year that might be dubbed as the year people would stop writing traditional letters.

　　After all, you had better ask no more questions about the future of traditional letter-writing because the smart-phone with high-tech computer features will be the future for communication. At this stage, some worried experts say that it is time to take a step back and reassess the value of letter-writing. Sadly, however, chances are that there is no turning back. (Essay created by Jeenn Lee Hsieh, ielts360toefl@hotmail.com )

　　》猫头鹰转播外教一节课，讲解如何改写真题为引言。这并不代表谢振礼老师的想法。

　　考雅思，考托福，如何写论说文的引言?或许最可靠又常用的方式就是改写作文题目，但是这样做的话，则千万要避免照抄真题。Warning: Don't Just Copy from the Question!

　　其实，猫头鹰认为这种最安全的开头方法也是最头痛的方法，因为改写题目中的英文句子而成为考生自己的句子，同时要保持大意不变，谈何容易!只怕文字英文的程度还不够吧!比方说同义字知多少?你有把握重新排列组合词汇句子标点?你时间够吗?有必要吗?

　　再说，考试就是考你用英文答题的能力，想花时间把真题改写为引言，了不起的结果仅仅是重复已知的问题，并非直接回答试题中问题，所以效率不高，好像只想凑凑字数而别无所求。猫头鹰在线写作研究室谢振礼老师不想鼓励新手老手采用这种技巧。如果你的英文应用水平超好，作文技巧只算是雕虫小技，大可无师自通，靠着本事而得心应手，所以用什么方法写开头都不会失败到哪里去，还保证高分在握。

　　假设你使用英文的习惯不良，猫头鹰建议你无须在一开头就暴露出你的弱点，道理在你并不精通改写题目的本事。(关于这一点值得名师学者争论。欢迎指点 ielts360toefl@hotmail.com

　　以下一节讲义是转播老外写议论文引言的一个方式：改写。猫头鹰特此声明，这一堂课恰好不是谢振礼老师鼓吹的作文开头方法。全部内涵取材自Free Online IELTS Advice 极有人气的雅思学习网站 www.ieltsbuddy.com

　　以下引用雅思之友网站。外教名师说--

　　You need a good essay introduction, but one thing you do not want is spend too long writing it so that you end up rushing your paragraphs. Therefore, you need a method to write your introduction fairly quickly. When you write an introduction, you should make sure you do two things:

　　1. Write a sentence introducing the topic and giving some background facts about it.

　　2. Tell the reader what you are going to say or writing about.

　　In your introduction, using some of the same words from the topic is acceptable, but don't copy whole phrases or sentences. If too much is copied, the examiner (rater) will deduct this from your word count and your essay could be considered as being too short.

　　猫头鹰插嘴再度把话说在前头，如果使用文字英文的火候不够，那么改写题目(paraphrase)中的句子并不是容易的事，往往是改写比自己造句还难。可想而知，不是所有的留学候选人都有这种改写能力，搞不好则烤鸭就变成鹦鹉，还不是等于把题目中的句子照唱一遍。

　　猫头鹰的用意并非在短期内骗新手烤鸭说可以在十天内学会改写的能力。锻炼改写英文到底是长久之计。当务之急必须另求良策，瞒天过海。猫头鹰以为写作既然是弱项，就得以弱项处理之，先要有自知之明，黯然承认自己的英文弱点(只要警惕而不用紧张，谢振礼将另外吹牛猫头鹰滑头的【隐形模板】)。

　　如此狂言，不怕你不相信!反正你不会栽在写作单项。何况，分数最低的弱项，反而最有提分的空间。可不是?

　　言归正传，继续转播老外的课程(猫头鹰才不干鹦鹉的把戏。猫头鹰的引言三句话：申论主题。集中焦点。话分两头。)。

　　外教名师举例：引言开头安全写法，参考--Examples 1-5: Paraphrasing a Topic for an Introduction

　　真题1A>Science and technology have helped the world make many advances. The arts, such as painting, theatre and dance--to name just three examples, however, are also valuable. What things do the arts provide to the world that science and technology do not?

　　改写1B

　　真题2A>According to a recent study, the more time people use the Internet, the less time they spend with real human beings. Some people say that instead of seeing the Internet as a way of opening up new communication possibilities worldwide, we should be concerned about the effects this is having on social interaction.

　　改写2B

　　真题3A>Unemployment has become an increasing problem in the recent past. What factors contribute to an increase in unemployment and what steps can be taken to solve the problem?